"Blissful Ambiguity" - Comments

[Bleach]

"Blissful Ambiguity" - Comments

A friend of mine composed this song, just wondering what you thought of it.
Putfile - Blissful Ambiguity Full

 

[DreamCatcher]

Sounds good Bleach...Its not music I would personally get into, but I'm old..

 

[Bleach]

Sounds good Bleach...Its not music I would personally get into, but I'm old..

First off,
HOLY SHIT WELCOME BACK!.

Secondly, thanks for the feedback. *IM's Dan*


Here's the Lyrics. Beautifully written IMO.

I've walked through Endless Hazes
Of Self Inflicted thought
Red Roses in their vases
Slowly I"ll watched them rot

I think in some way I've been
Just too damn Uninclined
To pick up broken pieces
Left to burn and fall behind

Lay here now inside my arms
Putting all your faith in me
Feel my weight against your chest
Blissfull Ambiguity

As you feel the final thrust
Deep inside your feeling me
This is where you placed your trust
Blissful Ambiguity

Take up the arms for me
Strike up the symphony
Putting Redder roses
on my grave
This time

As the burning bush once said
A Love lost is better dead
Take it as you will
But I'll be just fine


As I'm thinking logically
Never let emotions free
There just ain't no stopping me
As I stand and walk the line

With a hint of Apathy
Losing Ground with ever seed
Can't you see it's killing me
I can change

Lay here now inside my arms
Putting all your faith in me
Feel my weight against your chest
Blissfull Ambiguity

As you feel the final thrust
Deep inside your feeling me
This is where you placed your trust
Blissful Ambiguity

 

[Johabius]

First impression: The popping percussion sound is quite annoying, might do better with actual percussion instruments. The low range is a little over-powering during the beginning of the song. The piano work isn't bad, and the lyrics are nice. Could also use another vocalist during the chorus:

Lay here now inside my arms
Putting all your faith in me
Feel my weight against your chest
Blissfull Ambiguity

Maybe throw in some harmony with another vocalist during those parts.
Also could use a bridge somewhere in the middle of the song to beef it up a little bit.
With that said though, not bad for an amateur effort. Hope I don't come off as an ass, but just wanted to offer my honest constructive criticism.

 

[Radwen]

Theres pro's and con's to his voice .. sometimes it really sucks though. As an overall it reaches a good amateur level, but he'll need lots of vocal work if he's serious about this.

This feels like Rob Dougan .. which is good I guess . The beat is very simplistic and doesn't necessarily help the vocals. Its just there.

Theres potential ..

 

[HellRazor]

Can't pull up the audio here at work, but I like the lyrics. Very nice.